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The Pastor's Daughter by ~rebeldork:iconrebeldork:



As time ate away the flames
I raised my gaze and met her eyes
and in that one quick moment
I would not let eternity in
and though I knew what would come
I still let myself act like I was in love.

I could see she'd not yet felt love.
Her hair was the color of flames;
she had oceans in her eyes,
and she called down for me to come.
It took only a moment
for me to get myself in.

With her hands, she helped me in.
I felt my bloodless heart flutter, like love,
and between us there was just a moment,
something as fragile as a flame,
and I saw her story in her eyes:
I was lost; I could not wait to come.

It did not take this feeling long to come;
I did not want to let it in
but soon I was lost in her eyes.
It would be deadly to mistake it for love
but it is a similar, darker flame:
hunger; I recognized it in a moment.

I let myself get lost in the moment –
night, I thought, had taken too long to come,
and I saw her heart, burning like flames,
because she was naive enough to let that feeling in.
I wanted to take the flower, her love;
I hated the trust I saw in her eyes.

Finally the spark faded from her eyes.
She died in too many moments.
When dead, can one still love?
I doubt the answer will ever come,
but I took her blood, which once lay within,
and wrote a poem on her sun-kissed flesh, the words like flames.

The dead have no flames in their eyes.
Their bodies are lost in time’s gradual moments;
it was in this way I realized I could not ever again feel love.
©2008-2009 ~rebeldork
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Sestinaaaaaaaaaa! <3

These things are hard to write, and even harder to tell a story with, because not only are they repetitive, you kind of have to tell a story around the word that's at the end of the line, and that can change the entire line.

This is related to my story Greed in that it's presumably the same vampire. This, too, was based off of the German song "Die Unstillbare Gier" (The Unsatiable Greed) from the musical Tanz der Vampire. In that song he describes three of his victims; this is the second.
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Sestina was the second victim, then? ANGST. Pretty, sad...are you in a phase?

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(My APH buddies and I have odd conversations)
Canada: I would top America, right?
Poland: You're, like, already on top. (Speaking geographically)
China (Me): *chatting online with America* Canada says he'd top you.
America: WTF CANADA. NO. D:<
Sestina=first. I took some TIME writing this thing, unlike the ANGST!poem. Sestinas take time. You cannot rush them. XD nah, I'm kidding, it just takes more time to write a structured poem for me.

Phase? I'd LOVE to be. <3 But don't curse me.

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I just don't want to die without a few scars.
Chuck Palahniuk
I stil don't know what a Sestina is.

I hate phases. Blegh. I don't want to curse you.

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(My APH buddies and I have odd conversations)
Canada: I would top America, right?
Poland: You're, like, already on top. (Speaking geographically)
China (Me): *chatting online with America* Canada says he'd top you.
America: WTF CANADA. NO. D:<
It's a poem with a certain form. The last word on each line has to be something specific, and it's in a pattern - always 6 stanzas and a little thing on the end that has a name I forget. And the pattern goes like this:

1
2
3
4
5
6

6
1
5
2
4
3
and so on, and so on, and there's a pattern for the last thing, like 1&2, then 3&4, then 5&6, in that order.

Really restrictive, but hey, I don't have to rhyme! :w00t!:

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I just don't want to die without a few scars.
Chuck Palahniuk
Uh...right. That just confused me even more.

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(My APH buddies and I have odd conversations)
Canada: I would top America, right?
Poland: You're, like, already on top. (Speaking geographically)
China (Me): *chatting online with America* Canada says he'd top you.
America: WTF CANADA. NO. D:<
Did it just get warmer in here?
Poor Pastor. Now who will bring biscuits and the morning paper?
Great vampire poetry. :) Even though it's structured, it's transparently so.

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I went to see your pictures...I spread them across the floor...
So this is where they are shown...Now they're probably saying to you...
If you keep it up you'll be born. --Jane's Addiction
xD Thanks!

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I just don't want to die without a few scars.
Chuck Palahniuk

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